This is a sentence that stopped me in my tracks when I first read it. I've now been over it a half-dozen times and still don't think it works properly.
"I'll kill," Arthur continued to bellow, "the pair of you bloody buggers if you touch," he choked, "my brother."
I know what the author is trying to do, I just think that breaking the flow of the dialogue with descriptive passages, however small, wrecks the emotion and cadence of the sentence. I seem to be coming across this sort of thing a lot lately.
